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Lesson: Prewriting: Comparison and Contrast Exam# 355104
Prewriting: Compare and Contrast Advanced – score of 100%
The prewriting effectively addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of the prompt.
x The writer chose one of the assigned topics and submitted an outline or graphic organizer.
x The writer included all the required introductory information: a topic, background statement, and thesis statement.
x The thesis statement makes a claim or takes a position on the topic, and the main points are outlined clearly.
x The writer included at least 3 main points on the topic, with at least three supporting elements for each. The main points connect clearly to and support the thesis statement
x The writer’s conclusion reinforced the thesis statement. x The writer arranged the main points in a logical order to suit the claim made in the
thesis statement. x The supporting elements provided for each main point are relevant and clearly illustrate
the comparison and contrast pattern of development for the chosen topic. x The paper is mostly free of errors that interfere with a reader’s ability to understand the
content and uses the required font, header, line spacing, and margins.
Proficient- score of 85%
The prewriting adequately addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of the prompt.
x The writer chose one of the assigned topics and submitted an outline or graphic organizer.
x The writer included most of the required introductory information: a topic, background statement, and thesis statement.
x The thesis statement makes a claim or takes a position on the topic, but the main points are not outlined clearly.
x The writer included at least 3 main points on the topic, with at least two or more supporting elements for each. The main points connect to and support the thesis statement, however much of the information is obvious.
x The writer’s conclusion mostly reinforced the thesis statement. x The writer arranged the main points in an order that mostly suits the claim made in the
thesis statement. x The supporting elements provided for each main point are mostly relevant and
adequately illustrate the comparison and contrast pattern of development for the chosen topic.
x The paper is reasonably free of errors that interfere with a reader’s ability to understand the content and uses the required font, header, line spacing, and margins.
Developing- score of 70%
The prewriting partially addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of the prompt.
x The writer chose one of the assigned topics and submitted an outline or graphic organizer.
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x The writer included some of the required introductory information: a topic, background statement, and thesis statement, however some of these elements are missing.
x The thesis statement does not make a claim or take a position on the topic and/or the main points are not outlined.
x The writer included less than 3 main points on the topic and/or lacks three supporting elements for each. The main points do not completely connect to and support the thesis statement, and much of the information is obvious and/or needs more development.
x The writer’s conclusion is underdeveloped and/or is beginning to reinforce the thesis statement.
x The writer arranged the main points in an order that is beginning to suit the claim made in the thesis statement, but the outline lacks organization.
x The supporting elements provided for each main point lack focus, logical development, and are beginning to illustrate the comparison and contrast pattern of development for the chosen topic.
x The paper includes errors that interfere with a reader’s ability to understand the content and/or does not use the required font, header, line spacing, and margins.
Emerging- score of 60%
The prewriting minimally addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of the prompt.
x The writer chose one of the assigned topics but did not submit an outline or graphic organizer.
x The writer minimally included some of the required introductory information: a topic, background statement, and thesis statement, however most of these elements are missing.
x The thesis statement does not make a claim or take a position on the topic, is not related to the topic, and/or the main points are not outlined.
x The writer did not include 3 main points on the topic and/or lacks three supporting elements for each. The main points do not connect to and support the thesis statement, and much of the information is obvious and needs more development.
x The writer’s conclusion is underdeveloped, missing, and/or does not reinforce the thesis statement.
x The writer is beginning to arrange the main points in an order that is could suit the claim made in the thesis statement, but the outline lacks organization and focus.
x The supporting elements provided for each main point lack are minimally defined and do not illustrate the comparison and contrast pattern of development for the chosen topic.
x The paper includes some errors that make it difficult for a reader to understand the content and/or does not use the required font, header, line spacing, and margins.
Lesson: Prewriting: Comparison and Contrast Exam# 355104
Not Developed- score of 50%
The prewriting does not address the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of the prompt.
x The writer did not choose one of the assigned topics and/or did not submit an outline or graphic organizer.
x The writer did not include all the required introductory information: a topic, background statement, and thesis statement.
x The thesis statement does not make a claim or takes a position on the topic. x The writer did not include at least 3 main points on the topic, with at least three
supporting elements for each. The main points do not connect clearly to and support the thesis statement
x The writer’s conclusion does not reinforce the thesis statement. x The writer did not arrange the main points in a logical order to suit the claim made in
the thesis statement. x The supporting elements are not provided for each main point and/or are not relevant
and adequately illustrate the comparison and contrast pattern of development for the chosen topic.
x The paper includes significant errors that make it extremely difficult for a reader to understand the content and does not use the required font, header, line spacing, and margins.
Exam Number: 355104 Grade: 70 Date: 7/14/23 Instructor: SO
Instructions for Essay:
Thank you for your submission and hard work! You’re ready to move on to the formal essay. Before you start drafting your essay, you should
Review the exam instructions in your study materials online.
1. Apply the feedback I’ve included above.
2. Use the same topic for your essay as you did in this prewriting. Do not switch topics.
The compare and contrast essay is a formal essay based on this prewriting assignment. The goal is to compare and contrast your topic, make a debatable claim about that comparison, and prove that claim in your essay. Your essay will need
x An introduction with a thesis statement.
x Body paragraphs with topic sentences that each focus on one category.
x A conclusion that includes your paraphrased thesis.
Lesson: Prewriting: Comparison and Contrast Exam# 355104
Review the feedback I’ve provided and apply it as you work on your formal essay, which should be 1,000–1,200 words. If you have any questions as you work, don’t hesitate to let the school know.
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Topic: Comparing and contrasting online shopping and shopping at a physical location.
Background information: With the rise of technology, online shopping has become
increasingly popular, offering convenience and accessibility. However, traditional shopping at
physical locations still has its advantages in terms of sensory experiences and immediate product
availability.
Thesis Statement: Online shopping and shopping at a physical location differ in terms of
convenience, sensory experience, and product availability. Good thesis but it lacks an argument
as required. For example: Dogs make better pets than cats for solo-living introverts because
they provide emotional support, exercise, and security.
Point 1: Convenience
x Online shopping:
1. Can be done anytime and anywhere, providing a wide range of products at the
click of a button.
2. Allows for comparison shopping.
3. Eliminates the need to travel.
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x Shopping at a physical location:
1. Requires visiting a store in person, which may involve travel and limited store
hours.
2. Provides immediate access to products.
3. The ability to physically examine and try them.
Point 2: Sensory Experience
x Online shopping:
1. Lacks the sensory experience of physically interacting with products.
2. Relies on product descriptions, images, and customer reviews.
3. No opportunity to feel textures, try on clothes, or test functionality.
x Shopping at a physical location:
1. Offers a multisensory experience, allowing customers to touch, see, and even
smell products.
2. Provides the opportunity to try on clothes, test out electronics.
3. Evaluate the quality firsthand.
Point 3: Product Availability
x Online shopping:
1. Provides a vast selection of products from various sellers, including those that
may be difficult to find locally.
2. Can easily compare prices and read customer reviews.
3. Some items may be out of stock or have long delivery times.
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x Shopping at a physical location:
1. Offers immediate access to products, allowing customers to see and purchase
items on the spot.
2. Limited to the available inventory of a particular store.
3. Eliminates the need to wait for shipping.
Conclusion: While online shopping offers convenience and a wide range of options, shopping at
a physical location provides a sensory experience and immediate product availability. The choice
between the two depends on individual preferences, urgency, and the desire for personal
interaction with products. Good conclusion but your thesis must take a position.
Good effort.
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Essay: Comparison and Contrast
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Objective
To prepare a 1,200–1,250 word comparison-and-contrast essay based on elements from the Comparison and Contrast Prewriting assignment.
Note: You may not change your topic from the prewriting. You may not submit this essay until you've received your
grade and instructor feedback on your prewriting exam. While you're waiting for your prewriting review, you should do
the following:
Review the reading assignment about Comparison and Contrast and the provided example.
Prepare a rough draft of your Comparison and Contrast essay so that you're ready to revise when you receive
feedback on your prewriting.
For this essay, you’ll do the following:
Use prewriting, drafting, revising, and editing to write a formal, college-level essay
Distinguish among di�erent patterns of development.
Apply an appropriate pattern of development to a speci�c purpose and audience
Write e�ective thesis statements
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Develop paragraphs using topic sentences, adequate detail, supporting evidence, and transitions
Apply the conventions of standard written American English to produce correct, well-written essays
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You should also see a series of highlighted numbers in the evaluation chart identifying the rating you earned on each trait.
If you don’t see this feedback, click on the “View” tab and “Print Layout” or click on “Review” and the option “Final
Showing Markup.” If you still can’t see the feedback, contact the school for the complete evaluation.
Topic
�e development of your topic will depend on the topic you’ve chosen and the points you determined during the prewriting assignment.
Tip for Success: Be sure to check out the resources available to you in the Learning Resource Center for videos and
worksheets to help you complete this assignment.
Writing Your Essay
Your prewriting will require major reorganization and revision, including the following:
An introductory paragraph with a thesis statement that addresses the purpose of the essay Remember that your thesis statement must
be the last sentence of your introductory paragraph.
�ree to �ve body paragraphs that begin with topic sentences and clearly relate to and support the thesis statement as well as
combine elements from the narrative and process prewriting paragraphs
A conclusion that reinforces the thesis statement and the purpose of the essay
Essays must be typed and double-spaced using a standard 12-point font and left justi�cation. Use 1-inch margins at the top and bottom and 1.25-
inch margins for the left and right sides of the document. Each page must have a properly formatted header containing your name, student
number, exam number, page number, mailing address, and email address. Save your essay as a .doc, .docx, or .rtf �le regardless of the word
processing program you use.
Evaluation Rubric
Your instructor will evaluate your work for your comparison-and-contrast essay based on the following rubric.
Comparison and Contrast Essay
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Advanced—
Score of 100%
The essay e�ectively addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of
the prompt.
The essay provides a clear thesis statement that e�ectively introduces the
topic, states a claim, and previews the main points of the essay.
The essay provides speci�c, relevant evidence to illustrate ideas and support
the thesis in ways that are fresh, insightful, and engaging and uses comparison
and contrast to convey ideas.
The essay includes 2–3 categories for comparison and contrast to e�ectively
support the thesis statement.
The essay e�ectively includes an introduction paragraph with a thesis
statement that engages the reader, uses topic sentences to clearly de�ne
paragraphs, uses evidence that supports the thesis statement and topic
sentences, and includes a conclusion that reinforces the thesis.
The essay e�ectively addresses the audience through an appropriate tone and
point of view and if outside sources were used, includes correct MLA
formatting.
The essay is mostly free of errors in sentence structure, grammar, punctuation,
and word choice while meeting the length requirement (1,000–1,200 words)
and formatting requirements using the correct header, font, and margins.
Pro�cient—
Score of 85%
The essay adequately addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of
the prompt.
The essay provides a thesis statement that introduces the topic and the claim
is articulated, but the main points are not outlined explicitly.
The essay provides speci�c evidence to illustrate ideas and support the thesis,
though much of the information is obvious, and uses comparison and contrast
to adequately convey ideas.
The essay includes 2-3 categories but the categories could be more speci�c or
better used for comparison and contrast and in support of the thesis statement.
The essay includes an introduction with thesis statement, but the introduction
may not engage the reader. Most evidence provided is relevant to the body
paragraphs, thesis statement, and the topic sentences. The conclusion restates
the thesis, but may lack a satisfactory ending.
The essay adequately addresses the audience through an appropriate tone
and point of view and if outside sources were used, includes mostly correct
MLA formatting.
The essay is reasonably free of errors in sentence structure, grammar,
punctuation, and word choice and may just fall short of or exceed the length
requirements, however the essay is formatted using the correct header, font,
and margins, though some errors may be present.
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Developing—
Score of 70%
The essay partially addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of the
prompt.
The essay provides a thesis statement that is factual but o�ers no claim or
assertion. The thesis provides direction for the essay, but does not explicitly
outline main points.
The essay o�ers some speci�c evidence to illustrate ideas and support the
thesis, though much of the information is obvious, and attempts to use
comparison and contrast, though the essay lacks consistency.
The essay includes some categories for comparison and contrast, but the
categories could be more speci�c or better used for comparison and contrast
and/or do not fully support the thesis statement.
The essay includes an introduction that is underdeveloped, body paragraphs
with weak topic sentences that may lack focus, logical development or
evidence relevant to the thesis, and a conclusion that is underdeveloped.
The essay illustrates some awareness of audience but employs colloquial or
idiomatic language, lacking appropriate tone and/or outside sources were
used but not correctly formatted using MLA format.
The essay includes errors in sentence structure, grammar, punctuation, and
word choice, some of which may interfere with meaning, and may fall short of
or exceed the length requirements due to repetitive and unengaging content,
while not fully addressing the topic and purpose. The essay may not employ
the correct formatting.
Emerging—
Score of 60%
The essay minimally addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of
the prompt.
The essay attempts a thesis statement, but it is factual and/or not related to the
topic.
The essay o�ers general evidence and includes minimal comparison and
contrast elements, but it does not address the topic or purpose.
The essay minimally includes categories for comparison and contrast, but the
categories are not speci�c or used for comparison and contrast and/or do not
support the thesis statement.
The essay has an introduction that does not engage the reader, includes
minimally de�ned main ideas, isn’t organized into paragraphs, lacks topic
sentences, lacks evidence that relates to the thesis, lacks transitions, and/or
lacks a conclusion.
The essay addresses the appropriate audience but does not use an
appropriate tone. If used, outside sources are not correctly cited using MLA
format.
The essay contains some errors in sentence structure, grammar, punctuation,
and word choice, making it di�cult for the reader to follow and comprehend.
The essay also does not meet or signi�cantly exceeds the length requirement
and does not apply the correct formatting.
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Not Developed
— Score of
50%
The essay does not address the purpose of the assignment or the requirements of the
prompt.
The essay does not o�er a thesis statement.
The essay does not provide speci�c, relevant evidence to illustrate ideas and
support the thesis and does not employ comparison and contrast to convey
ideas.
The essay does not include categories for comparison and contrast, and/or the
categories do not fully support the thesis statement.
The essay has an introduction that does not engage the reader, lacks clearly
de�ned main ideas, isn’t organized into paragraphs, lacks evidence that relates
to the thesis, lacks transitions, and/or lacks a conclusion.
The essay does not address the appropriate audience and does not use an
appropriate tone. If used, outside sources are not cited using MLA format
correctly.
The essay contains numerous errors in sentence structure, grammar,
punctuation, and word choice, making it di�cult for the reader to follow and
comprehend, while also not meeting the length and/or formatting
requirements.
